Collaborative Excersize 11.5.15

The ad appeals by having the picture of the puppy who is very cute and by asking the question Will you be my miracle? This communicates to the audience that they can help. Also, 60 cents is bolded, which shows how easy it is to help the animals. This appeals to reader's values because for only 60 cents  a day, why wouldn't you want to help these animals. We feel that the ad is targeting the general public, but if ASPCA was trying to target specific groups of people, they could change the animal and the text depending on their purpose. In another medium, the ad would not be as effective because you would not be able to see the picture of the puppy, which is the main focus point of the ad.


   This ad is irritating because it is for a fast food restaurant but she is eating a salad and a diet Coke. Also, her clothing and the position she is in does not apply to what the product is. It is sexist and demeaning because if she were a man, she would not be posed the way she is. You can barely tell what the ad is for because she is the main focus. The ad is trying to be sexual, but it is not appealing. If it were changed to appeal to a different audience, a different celebrity would be used and they would not be in a bed. The focus would be on the actual product vs who is representing it.

Old Spice Ad
The ad is meant to be funny and make you laugh. It is very fast paced and the man is very confident. At the end, it has the same sound as in every Old Spice commercial to make you remember the product. For a different audience, the dialogue would be different and he wouldn't start by saying "hello ladies". The ad would not be as effective if it were a print ad because there would be no dialogue, comedic timing, and as much detail. Overall, we thought it was funny and it gave the audience a positive impression of the product.

Works Cited:
Hershey, Dillon. "Pet Euthanasia." You and the World Blog Post #1. Science Leadership Academy, 29 Nov. 2012. Web. 05 Nov. 2015.                                                  

"Kim Kardashian Plugging Carl's Jr. Chicken Salads." RSS. N.p., 22 Dec. 2009. Web. 05 Nov. 2015.                         

"Old Spice: "The Man Your Man Could Smell Like." YouTube. YouTube, n.d. Web. 05 Nov. 2015.

Exercise on pg 62

Taking sides:


1. In arguing with my boyfriend whose fault an event was.
2.How long it takes to get to school.
3.How many times  a week I should practice pitching.
4.Where is a good place to try get a job.
5.Whether or not I should play for the high school bowling team again.
6.Whether I should go to showcase camps for fast pitch.
7.What college I want to attend after graduation.
8.What classes to sign up for next quarter.
9.How to check grades.


We all take positions on different topics, its how we converse. We wouldn't have much to talk about if we didn't share our opinion and sides of things. It's how we argue and change other peoples minds about things. We use our own positions on life to create the lives we want, or at least try to. It's how we choose our politicians and leaders. We listen to their positions on our country or group and whoever we agree with is who we follow or vote for. People take positons all the time, whether its deciding what to eat for dinner or which president to vote, positions are a part of daily life.

Writers Workshop/ Peer Response Rough Draft 2

1. The guiding question in the analysis is very clear.


2. The beginning of the analysis includes the words "Popular belief" which catches the readers eye because people like the thought of being popular, it appeals to them and causes them to want to know what could make them popular, so they can keep reading.


3. The subject is described in great detail especially for the amount that was completed so far.


4. The paper is not all the way complete but it gets the point across very directly and very quickly.


5. As you read the paper it becomes clear but it is not explicitly stated in a thesis.


6. The writer uses evidence from various websites and ads to support her analysis.


7. The sources that have been used in this analysis sound and appear credible and knowledgeable which convinces the reader to view the topic the same way as the writer.


8. No other perspectives have been used so far.


9.The tone is very knowledgeable and understanding of the topic which causes the reader to feel as if they are being taught by a teacher and they should believe everything that is stated in the analysis.


10. So far the analysis is designed very well and it is very easy to read.


11. The analysis is very organized and transitions very well into the next idea.


12. The style is very factual and is backed constantly with facts stated in the writing.


13. The draft hasn't concluded yet.


14. The title states very clearly that this is an analysis.

Writers Workshop/ Peer Response Rough Draft 1

1.I don't see the guiding question in this rough draft.


2. The opening of the analysis catches the readers attention when it refers to rebelliousness because it intrigues the reader and they want to keep reading.


3.There is a lot of detail in the analysis that keep the reader interested and explains the analysis in a way that the reader can easily understand.


4. The analysis is very well done and the information is very well organized and stated.


5. Yes, the point of the analysis is very clear because it is stated and labeled before the analysis is actually started and then it appears again in the paper.


6.They provide a lot of evidence through magazine covers and sayings that the company's use to prove the analysis correct.


7. There are no sources cited.


8. There really is no counterargument when it comes to the words and pictures used in the ads meaning freedom and rebellion, which the analysis states.


9. The tone of the analysis is very knowledgeable and excited about the topic which portrays the interest of the topic that the writer has into the writing which makes the reader enjoy the writing.


10. The analysis is very well shaped and easy to read and understand because it is very organized and understandable.


11. The style of the paper is very appropriate for the audience it was written for.


12. There is a conclusion that was very well put and even starts with "In conclusion,", which makes the reader realizes that the topic is getting wrapped up and is coming to an end.




13. There is no title.